Where do you get off?

[DTQ]

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[DTQ]

Someone must have something to say about this, it's terrible, it's great, I don't get it, you suck you pinko commie liberal tree hugger. Whatever it is just spit it out.

[Dandapani]

elucidate. bad word choice. very jarring. rest flowed well. interesting analogy.

[DTQ]

Thank you.

[Miss Maggie]

Originally posted by DTQ
Someone must have something to say about this, it's terrible, it's great, I don't get it, you suck you pinko commie liberal tree hugger. Whatever it is just spit it out.

What is your purpose for this writing?

Ideally effective writing will be an invisible window which displays the ideas and information the writer is trying to convey. What I see hear is a writer struggling to get the point across. It's hard to get to the heart of your message because the complexity of the wording distracts. The piece would be much more effective if you simplified it and did away with as much passive voice as possible.