View Full Version : So, I wrote some poems...
...but I don't think I can post them due to some language and topics. I'm actually interested in sharing, but honestly do not think I can post them. I really don't care if you hate them either. Cuz, they sure aren't for everyone's taste.
Any poets out there interested in hearing some of my poetry (well, reading it, I guess)? I guess I could email...
I think women would like some of my writing the best. But, I'm pretty dark at times.
If you are interested, let me know...k?
Here's one of the "clean" ones (at least I think it's clean). I believe poetry is meant to be recited or read outloud. I don't need feedback. Just either enjoy or hate or cry or ignore. I'm just putting it out there cuz someone told me to and I am starting a new trend, listening to people I care about and/or respect.
The Dishes Flew
December 30, 2006
I asked you why.
You couldnít answer.
But the weight
I asked you for help.
You couldnít give me.
But the battle
tied me up
and held me
I asked you to listen.
You didnít hear me.
But the shouts
I asked you to love me.
You werenít able.
But the piercing LIES
I asked you to hold my hand.
a p a r t
rage in my heart
of broken telephones
cat scratch fever
in the eyes
insignificant I felt
and you noticed
I asked you to look at me.
I asked you to hold me.
-Heather Blackburn McNeil
You need a :hugs:
Originally posted by dmobrien2001
You need a :hugs: :supergrin: Thanks. But, believe it or not, that's my dark side. My "out". I stay sane by writing the evil thoughts or happenings and then am quite content.
I haven't had much time to let the writing juices flow lately and I felt a bit unbalanced. This poem is from a LONG time ago in reality. OVER 7 years ago. So, thanks for the hug, but it is NOT my present....nor will it be my future.
I gotta go to the grocery store and then write a grad. paper.
Take it easy!:thumbsup:
I really like it. That's what's so great about poetry: EXPRESSION.
Can I ask what was the theme or background to this? I think it's deeper than just your "dark side".
7 CAV A TROOP
I thought it showed reselience,a backed in a corner kind of faceoff,finally a coiled snake bobbing,rattling,weaving,a standoff.Princess T. that was moving.Well done....:wavey:
Some pretty powerful stuff there! I haven't dabbled in poetry or writing for nearly a decade but did keep a detailed journal of my time spent in former Yugoslavia 10 years ago while in the military. Some pretty depressing stuff & a life changing experience to say the least.
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