Good job. I, personally, didn't like the rather unexpected ending, as I had originally interpreted this as a combat-oriented piece. But if this was your intention, that is fine. The description was fairly good and I liked the style of it. The fluidity of the piece needs a minor amount of work, but it was otherwise good. Keep writing!
PS: What do you think of deviantart? I've been considering joining, but wasn't sure if it was truly worth it?
Last edited by Scarecrow28; 04-29-2008 at 16:14..